Gabby's story
1)"Boston ended up being a complete disaster. The schools were branched off in the woods, people had accents, the streets were really long and weird, the speed limits were so low and police officers seemed to be everywhere." This is a good description because you talk about how the schools,people and streets are different from Chicago.
2) You should go more in dept on how your mom's boyfriend treated you differently compared to his own child. That could really add to the overall effect of having a father figure in your life.
3)Not having a father figure in your life has forced you to grow up and mature a little faster than normal but in the ended you are more prepared for the obstacles in life that you will eventually have to overcome.
4)She became a stronger person by going through most of her life without a father so I believe her literacy is growing up early.
5)It is a good story, I can really tell that you had to grow up faster than most girls and that life isn't always a fairy tale. You do a good job naming many specific events that really stick out in your mind they are good because the are memorable.
6)You have a lot of interesting points in the story that you should elaborate on like how your life was different once your mom starting dating her boyfriend, or how it changed when you got a new baby sister , and also how life was different in Boston.