Andrew Vasquez
Mr. Douglas
History 101a
September 1, 2010
The main idea of “The Worst Mistake in the History of the Human Race” is that the switch from hunting and gathering as a main source of food to agriculture as a main source of food was a terrible mistake for the human race. I believe the thesis “with agriculture came the gross social and sexual inequality, the disease and despotism, that curse our existence.” Diamond backs up his argument with many claims. One such claim is that hunters and gathers had better diets than people who farmed because their diet was not always the same each day. Another fact is agriculture was the start of a social inequality because people who had a surplus of food now had more wealth and power than people who were in need of food. Diamond also states, “ For instance, the average time devoted each week to obtaining food is only 12 to 19 hours for one group of Bushmen, 14 hours less for the Hadza nomads of Tanzania. (Diamond 100).” This proves that farming did not open up more free time it actually took up more free time. The idea that agriculture was the start of a social class agrees with our lecture theme. Social stratification becomes present and people start claiming power as a direct result of agriculture.
Wednesday, September 1, 2010
Wednesday, December 2, 2009
Unit 5 Group Questions
1) What is good about this essay? What could be improved?
It has a good introduction the beginng is a good intrest catcher, good organization throughout and a lot of details? It needs to have less details and more major points.The organization problem could be fixed if the author used more transitional sentences.
2) What is this essay’s thesis? What is the support she uses to back it up?
“A superior paper is made up of solid research, meaning and all the rhetorical devises, which are just some of the writing skills I have learned this semester in English 101.” She doesn’t support her thesis in her paper.
3) Does the author use enough quotations and discussion of her experiences in 101 to justify her thesis and subpoints?
Yes, the author uses quotations regularly to back up her experiences with the English 101 units.
4) Now, looking back on her essay try to figure out another way she might organize it. Using cut and paste reorganize this essay—be ready to explain your organizational ethos to the class.
5) What information does she include about her failures, successes, improvements, & class work & skills that helped her be a better writer?
At first she said, “Before taking this class I did not even know what a rhetorical devise was.” but then she describes how she learned how many different skills throughout the course that helped her become a better writer. She describes failures and successes and improvements. She didn't describe it through paper.
6) Does she believe she is a better writer after 101? Yes/No why?
Yes, because she learned how to organize a paper like a house. She accomplishes metacongnition very well in her paper.
It has a good introduction the beginng is a good intrest catcher, good organization throughout and a lot of details? It needs to have less details and more major points.The organization problem could be fixed if the author used more transitional sentences.
2) What is this essay’s thesis? What is the support she uses to back it up?
“A superior paper is made up of solid research, meaning and all the rhetorical devises, which are just some of the writing skills I have learned this semester in English 101.” She doesn’t support her thesis in her paper.
3) Does the author use enough quotations and discussion of her experiences in 101 to justify her thesis and subpoints?
Yes, the author uses quotations regularly to back up her experiences with the English 101 units.
4) Now, looking back on her essay try to figure out another way she might organize it. Using cut and paste reorganize this essay—be ready to explain your organizational ethos to the class.
5) What information does she include about her failures, successes, improvements, & class work & skills that helped her be a better writer?
At first she said, “Before taking this class I did not even know what a rhetorical devise was.” but then she describes how she learned how many different skills throughout the course that helped her become a better writer. She describes failures and successes and improvements. She didn't describe it through paper.
6) Does she believe she is a better writer after 101? Yes/No why?
Yes, because she learned how to organize a paper like a house. She accomplishes metacongnition very well in her paper.
Monday, November 2, 2009
prompt excerise
The most important principle to overview in the Unit 4 essay is to not make this literature review a plain summary. The synthesis or literature review should require you to forward a thesis and cover all the material we have learned in the previous units. In the essay you will intemperate what the authors question of the issue will be, and evaluate their attitude towards it.
Thursday, September 10, 2009
Adrian Garcia's Most Problematic Paragraph
Many people believe that this hobby is a thing that anyone and everyone can actually do. Some also believe that people who DJ(Need to add commas before who and after DJ) are kids who have nothing better else to do with their lives. But knowing that I am a DJ now, I must say that all these people are wrong. This hobby takes a lot of talent and those who pursue DJ’ing are smart in school and do tons of things with their lives and better themselves all around as a person.(Run-on sentence) I can say this because I am experiencing this at the moment.
Most Problematic Paragraph
One muggy summer night when the air was thick with humidity and the mosquitoes bit over and over again. I stood on the mound with a freshly opened game ball. Its bleach white skin was only a temporary to the sweat and dirt that it would accumulate over the 7 innings of baseball ahead. "Hey niner here play ball,” screamed the umpire. The adrenaline rush I got before I threw that first pitch was incredible. After throwing 2 innings my arm felt great my team was making plays and I mean really good plays not just fundamental plays that are expected in the begging of the season. This was the end of the road and everyone was on the ball. Likewise was the opposing team from near by Saint Charles. I threw a couple K’s over 2 innings and by the fifth inning our bats started light the sky up with line drives. The other team through started to catch me on a couple bad pitches and they produced a steady offense throughout the game.
Tuesday, September 8, 2009
Second Draft
My early childhood years were full of tee ball, peewee, and junior basketball games. It was hard to be the star player when my teammates were all older than me. I was always the youngest player on the field. Sure there is going to be some mild intimidation at first but from a very you age I had always loved baseball more than any other sport. Eventually by the time I hit double digits I stuck strictly to baseball. By devoting all my time and effort into baseball I was able to refine my "fundamental baseball skills". That’s what my pitching camp coach always reiterates to me every 60 min session I had with him. I started throwing with Chuck Neil in the spring of 2005 by time I was fourteen. He ran a pitching camp in Naperville, Illinois that was known for producing some of the top pitchers in the area. My parents would drive me there 3 days a week for sixty minute session with Chuck. From the first day I could tell he was very knowledgeable on the art of pitching. He help me developed my pitching skills significantly faster than the rest of the kids my age.
This opened new doors for me to play with the North Aurora River Rats fourteen year old travel team. They only take a select amount of players and travel all over state and sometimes out to surrounding states for tournaments. This allowed me to play the best of the best that were the same age as me. Right around this time I noticed that I could compete with the older kids. My intimidation and fear that I had before of being the youngest player never crossed my mind when I was pitching now because we were all on an even age. In the travel leagues I was able to be tested. All the years of travel baseball ending up building to my most defining moment in my baseball years to date.
It was early August 2007 and I was 16. I found myself on the team bus to Northern Illinois Travel World Series. All my hard work over the past 10 years finally paid off that year. When I got to Rockford I was in the zone I knew I would probably have to throw twice within a 3 day span. I knew what to expect I had played most of the teams there at least once during the regular season. They ended up saving me the first game 3 games and I was on the spotlight for the last game on the season. The pressure only caused me to be more focused. After watching my team blow through 3 games with no problem I was able to use my immense confidence to push a side all the pressure. I had been dreaming of this game since tee ball and I was in the exact position I wanted to be.
One muggy summer night when the air was thick with humidity and the mosquitoes bit over and over again. I stood on the mound with a freshly opened game ball. Its bleach white skin was only a temporary to the sweat and dirt that it would accumulate over the 7 innings of baseball ahead. "Hey niner here play ball,” screamed the umpire. The adrenaline rush I got before I threw that first pitch was incredible. After throwing 2 innings my arm felt great my team was making plays and I mean really good plays not just fundamental plays that are expected in the begging of the season. This was the end of the road and everyone was on the ball. Likewise was the opposing team from near by Saint Charles. I threw a couple K’s over 2 innings and by the fifth inning our bats started light the sky up with line drives. The other team through started to catch me on a couple bad pitches and they produced a steady offense throughout the game. It was the final inning and we were up by two runs. Before I went out my dad came over to me and said, " hey buddy remember this is your game go out there relax and throw hard." I did just that I threw as hard as I could and stuck the first batter out and the second. All my teammates started to yell encouragement out from the field behind me. The next batter gave me the scare of my life. After three or four pitches he cracked out dead center on me. My heart dropped and I was thanking God that no other runners where on base. They were now within one run of forcing extra innings. This put me on the spot, my arm was dead, and all are other available pitchers were still nursing their recently used arms. I had to force next batter out no matter what. After 5 pitches, which seemed like an eternity I was about to struck him out on a high fast ball that I got him to chase at.
My early childhood years were full of tee ball, peewee, and junior basketball games. It was hard to be the star player when my teammates were all older than me. I was always the youngest player on the field. Sure there is going to be some mild intimidation at first but from a very you age I had always loved baseball more than any other sport. Eventually by the time I hit double digits I stuck strictly to baseball. By devoting all my time and effort into baseball I was able to refine my "fundamental baseball skills". That’s what my pitching camp coach always reiterates to me every 60 min session I had with him. I started throwing with Chuck Neil in the spring of 2005 by time I was fourteen. He ran a pitching camp in Naperville, Illinois that was known for producing some of the top pitchers in the area. My parents would drive me there 3 days a week for sixty minute session with Chuck. From the first day I could tell he was very knowledgeable on the art of pitching. He help me developed my pitching skills significantly faster than the rest of the kids my age.
This opened new doors for me to play with the North Aurora River Rats fourteen year old travel team. They only take a select amount of players and travel all over state and sometimes out to surrounding states for tournaments. This allowed me to play the best of the best that were the same age as me. Right around this time I noticed that I could compete with the older kids. My intimidation and fear that I had before of being the youngest player never crossed my mind when I was pitching now because we were all on an even age. In the travel leagues I was able to be tested. All the years of travel baseball ending up building to my most defining moment in my baseball years to date.
It was early August 2007 and I was 16. I found myself on the team bus to Northern Illinois Travel World Series. All my hard work over the past 10 years finally paid off that year. When I got to Rockford I was in the zone I knew I would probably have to throw twice within a 3 day span. I knew what to expect I had played most of the teams there at least once during the regular season. They ended up saving me the first game 3 games and I was on the spotlight for the last game on the season. The pressure only caused me to be more focused. After watching my team blow through 3 games with no problem I was able to use my immense confidence to push a side all the pressure. I had been dreaming of this game since tee ball and I was in the exact position I wanted to be.
One muggy summer night when the air was thick with humidity and the mosquitoes bit over and over again. I stood on the mound with a freshly opened game ball. Its bleach white skin was only a temporary to the sweat and dirt that it would accumulate over the 7 innings of baseball ahead. "Hey niner here play ball,” screamed the umpire. The adrenaline rush I got before I threw that first pitch was incredible. After throwing 2 innings my arm felt great my team was making plays and I mean really good plays not just fundamental plays that are expected in the begging of the season. This was the end of the road and everyone was on the ball. Likewise was the opposing team from near by Saint Charles. I threw a couple K’s over 2 innings and by the fifth inning our bats started light the sky up with line drives. The other team through started to catch me on a couple bad pitches and they produced a steady offense throughout the game. It was the final inning and we were up by two runs. Before I went out my dad came over to me and said, " hey buddy remember this is your game go out there relax and throw hard." I did just that I threw as hard as I could and stuck the first batter out and the second. All my teammates started to yell encouragement out from the field behind me. The next batter gave me the scare of my life. After three or four pitches he cracked out dead center on me. My heart dropped and I was thanking God that no other runners where on base. They were now within one run of forcing extra innings. This put me on the spot, my arm was dead, and all are other available pitchers were still nursing their recently used arms. I had to force next batter out no matter what. After 5 pitches, which seemed like an eternity I was about to struck him out on a high fast ball that I got him to chase at.
Friday, September 4, 2009
Gabby's story
1)"Boston ended up being a complete disaster. The schools were branched off in the woods, people had accents, the streets were really long and weird, the speed limits were so low and police officers seemed to be everywhere." This is a good description because you talk about how the schools,people and streets are different from Chicago.
2) You should go more in dept on how your mom's boyfriend treated you differently compared to his own child. That could really add to the overall effect of having a father figure in your life.
3)Not having a father figure in your life has forced you to grow up and mature a little faster than normal but in the ended you are more prepared for the obstacles in life that you will eventually have to overcome.
4)She became a stronger person by going through most of her life without a father so I believe her literacy is growing up early.
5)It is a good story, I can really tell that you had to grow up faster than most girls and that life isn't always a fairy tale. You do a good job naming many specific events that really stick out in your mind they are good because the are memorable.
6)You have a lot of interesting points in the story that you should elaborate on like how your life was different once your mom starting dating her boyfriend, or how it changed when you got a new baby sister , and also how life was different in Boston.
1)"Boston ended up being a complete disaster. The schools were branched off in the woods, people had accents, the streets were really long and weird, the speed limits were so low and police officers seemed to be everywhere." This is a good description because you talk about how the schools,people and streets are different from Chicago.
2) You should go more in dept on how your mom's boyfriend treated you differently compared to his own child. That could really add to the overall effect of having a father figure in your life.
3)Not having a father figure in your life has forced you to grow up and mature a little faster than normal but in the ended you are more prepared for the obstacles in life that you will eventually have to overcome.
4)She became a stronger person by going through most of her life without a father so I believe her literacy is growing up early.
5)It is a good story, I can really tell that you had to grow up faster than most girls and that life isn't always a fairy tale. You do a good job naming many specific events that really stick out in your mind they are good because the are memorable.
6)You have a lot of interesting points in the story that you should elaborate on like how your life was different once your mom starting dating her boyfriend, or how it changed when you got a new baby sister , and also how life was different in Boston.
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